============ 6:15pm April 6, 2013
My brain hurts, but I see progres! Only a few hours ago, I didn’t like the title and had no clue how to proceed!
Now, I’m simply arguing with myself about the last verse. I’d love to find a perfect rhyme (stable) for “back”, but there ain’t one that fits. “Black” is perfect, but, I don’t see how to use it in the happy homecoming verse.
I can stabilize using ABAB with perfect A rhymes. Maybe a repetition of the last line.
Keeping the options open for a bridge, if any. Storm breaks, eye of the hurricane. Warm sunlight. Oh, warm sunlight dries up the tears from the storm.
Taking a break, let the brain swelling die down. I think I’ve earned the right to renewed procrastinate, I see being able to converge this by the due date…