Week 2. This audio, finally, reveals the reason why I prefer to work with younger performers :-). Apologies to North and RBT in advance.
I’m a songwriter, not a performer.
This version was done with a phone. I let my timing wander (as I almost always do).
I tried this for a whole afternoon with a drum track, and, it sounded worse :-).
Bryan Potvin challenged us to write a song with a story.
Lately, I’ve been listening to Brandy Clark’s latest album (Big Time in a Small Town). She’s one of the most clever songwriters and story tellers around.
I tried to channel Brandy as I noodled around with several story ideas.
I know Nik Stauskas’ parents well (in fact his mom’s mom taught me early piano) and explored the idea of writing about a dunk wizard. The available articles about him were way too sports oriented and left me with no story to write.
I, then remembered how I used to be a photography buff. I finally quit taking pictures when I realized that I wasn’t seeing my kids grow up except through the eyepiece of a camera.
That gave a germ of an idea and the rest is fiction.
The verses are AxxA rhyme scheme, 4 stresses, 3, 4, 3, fairly front-heavy. The chorus is back heavy (sung off the downbeat).
If I were critiquing this, the first thing I would notice is that “of” (3rd verse, 3rd line) is sung in a spotlight position (melodically significant note).
Shame on me.
If I were a better performer (and had time to sing this in), I would insert some rests to move “of” onto a less significant note of the melody.
During a conversation this week, I promised to post my analysis of Let Her Go. It is here